dreaming_mouse

At the moment Harry Potter, I tried to read LOTR last year but I think the films plus everything going on put me off. The films are just boring, when ...

I like how you can get a feel straight away from the language you're using that this is set pre 1900s. It reminds me of the classics with the intelligent ...

I didn’t really understand this but I know nothing about ships and you were using quite a few of the technical terms, which is good but for people who don’t ...

I thought this was okayish, but I didn’t really know where it was going. For example I think this kind of had a mix of being a story, poem and ...

I didn’t really feel anything for this story; even when you said about the woman and her baby dying I didn’t feel anything. There’s no real emotion in the story, ...

I was in English, either day dreaming or sleeping when it happened and since I'm in England we never got told. I got home dropped my bag on the floor ...

I think its a great piece of writing, it kept my eyes glued to the screen and blocked out the T.V lol. I like how you describe things but I ...

I think it's a good way to open up a story, most prologues give a history or something. It's rare to find a story that starts off with an invitation. ...

This is really good - you have a lot of talent as a writer :D There were some things that were hard to read and I had to reread over ...

I like this but I think you ended it to soon lol, was that intentional or was it all you've gotten done so far? Okay there were a few spelling ...

That was so sad and moving! I was crying at the end of it :oops:, you're a very talented writer! I loved the way how you described everything including the ...

I think this could be a really good story but it does need quite a bit of development. You need to put in some more detail like what are the ...

I love Tamora Pierce :D I can't wait till the sequeal to Trickster's Choice comes out :D The hardback one is out but I can't find it in any shops ...

I ran fast-faster than I'd ever run before. Try; I ran faster , faster than I'd ever run before. I thought the - was a little bit unclear and I ...

I thought it was great and it kept me hooked but there were some parts that were a bit too over described or forced. The cool, lemony air sits on ...