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Thanks for what you said here. I corrected Paul to Peter so thanks for that. The lines "death was arrested" and One every little thing I make up my mind ...

Thanks for the review! This was a bit of an experiment with onomatopoeia so thanks for your feedback on that. I wanted the transfer of perspective from Nereid to the ...

Thanks so much for the encouragement! I was really nervous since I generally avoid religious stuff in my writing but I've been growing lately and wanted to stretch out and ...

First, thanks for the review! Second, I think Lay and Laid are both past tense of Lie though, Laid is about a person Laid something down, whereas Lay is the ...

"It was just that she wanted to be a normal merl. SHe" This was in paragraph 8. the SHe should be She. I also don't know if this space was ...

Thanks a lot. This is the first part of a book I'm writing and I'll be posting more soon. Would you like to be part of the tag list so ...

Sounds good. Can't wait to read the whole thing ;)

Yeah, this is a lot better with the context. As a fanfic I didn't feel the need to explain a lot of things and the character was a self insert ...

Thanks for the review! I may try to highlight the dialogue so thanks for that. The info dump in the middle was more in keeping with the style of beyblade ...

As a writer it's so great to see you make the connection to Ceiba in this story. I want the reader to know that even though they both think the ...

This is a side character from a book I'm writing, heavily inspired by Wings of Fire (my favorite series as well). The forest was actually inspired by the movie, Avatar. ...

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you pointed out the adverb stuff and how Ladon explaining Smolder's origin felt like the narrator speaking through the character. A lot of the ...

thanks for the review. If you want to know more about Nightshade's lover, read my three part story "An adventure with Nightshade"

Thanks for the advice! You really seem to know a lot about reviewing and writing as a whole. I did intend for my Nightshade series to be read chronologically (I ...

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