dragonfphoenix

Ah, didn't think of that. It would make sense (and simply the addition of "magic" as an adjective clears a lot of that up. It makes it seem a bit ...

Hmm...well, if you haven't read Artemis Fowl I would recommend it. It has that surface occasionally, and it's a really good series to study the influence (or lack of effectiveness) ...

Ah, I mistook Kita as his first name (Akira being unisex understood and acknowledged). I derped the order you're supposed to read the name. Cool. Ah, I see. Well, glad ...

No problem, glad to help. I think your concerns on style come down to, do you want this to be extremely realistic and risk losing readers, or do you want ...

The comparison of same-sex marriage to criminal activity was done for the reason that there is a moral code of law written on every person's heart. We know what's right ...

ah, I see. that's an entirely different series than what I thought it was. Have you read Percy Jackson? If you have, then you can hopefully understand why I'd mistake ...

It should be Shift Enter to fix that problem, although there is also a BBCode to do that that I don't know off the top of my head.

Then my question changes to why didn't they see them when the door was shut? And how big is this door? You have two full-grown females hiding behind it (without ...

I think that would work. It flowed okay.

That'd be fine, just PM it to me

.... Gr.... Please put it back up so it can be reviewed and we can help. If you take it down, we can't review it, and then we have this ...

Well duh, that's your legs. I'm not talking about leg strength, I'm talking upper body. If you meant his legs, then please specify that.

Warden is his name, not his title (I think; if that's not the case the Snoink can correct me).

No problem, glad to help.

Based on the current length, I would say an actual poem. Glad it helped.