dragonfphoenix

Knight Dragon, here to review! Are you attempting to go for incorrect capitalization? "we are a caesura", the we should be capitalized. And in most of the stanzas, the last ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! I'm reading this entire poem wanting a little better punctuation. For example, "Four foot three she" should have a comma after "three" to help with ...

Apparently I should have included more than I did to get this out of the Green Room. So ignore this next part as a repost: "As is, this is poetic ...

Well, the opening stanzas are pretty rough, but this line just stuck out "Some may anger because I'm not patriotic". "anger" doesn't fit. You could go colloquial and say "hate" ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! This line was two beats too short: "thunder washes up where i" (and your I needs to be capitalized). These three lines seemed to lose ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Okay, this was fine until I got to the sentence before this one: "Dragons were a very old form of magical security that had slowly ...

Hi, Knight Dragon, here to review! Wow, I must admit that was very well written. The two biggest things were formatting. When you're retelling the scene when he's in the ...

Since these are lyrics, I have one question. How are you supposed to sing/chant "That he's (she's) gone"? (By the way this line felt too short). How do you sing ...

All right, I liked what you were doing with the poem, but it felt a little rough to read through. The "Shoes,/they..." was just rough to read [and in case ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! All right, the big technical thing: "She was about to lift her head to collapse on Georges shoulder", you forgot your apostrophe after "George"; plural ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! So, this was the only awkward sentence in the piece. " Digging in her mess of a bag, she found her keys, and floored it ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! All right, technical first. This is the first time I've ever used a quote to talk about something other than the quote itself. "Even if ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! [I am seriously high on sugar right now, but I'll try to be calm in this review] Technical: "You have your own thoughts, let them ...

Your definition of "nerd" is a bit extreme. Nerds can be socially interactive, but only if they choose to be. Nerd is NOT synonymous with "social outcast". And what do ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! "Ralni reached out and smacked Mitch hard in the cheek, then grabbed the back of Faith's cloak, tossing her onto a horse's back", what happened ...