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Knight Dragon, here to review on this gloriously exhilarating Review Day! Technical: I think your formatting got messed up. Your italics didn't work. Isaac shows up instead of the italicized ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this lovely Review Day! Technical: "Their young faces have been corrupted by war The same faces that were once so full of life have ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this glorious Review Day! Technical: "The bartender straightens his cap" should have a comma after it for better reading flow. "He takes up the ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "Whence the moon shine with such deceit", "shine" should be "shone". "Suffocates me and release my tears", "release" should ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on Review Day. Since this is lyrical, "a million chances and a million things" if you put "and" in the next line, then the rhythm ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a Review Day review upon your work! Technical: You need to put proper spacing in here. Every sentence butts up against the previous, and the ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a Review Day review upon you. @TheMessenger: Am I really that predictable now? Wow...well, yes, I am going to give the technical analysis. But don't ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a Review Day review upon your work! I am reading this with the understanding you wish me to, but I will still review it properly. ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a Review Day review upon your first post. First off, welcome to YWS!!! You just snuck in here for Review Day. Congratulations. Anyway, on to ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a Review Day review upon you! Technical: “There’s a boy.” Lux said, “he said he’d text me, but he hasn’t.” Punctuation for this sentence should ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a third review on your work on this glorious Review Day! Technical first, as almost always: "They ate their breakfast in silence; neither wanting to ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a Review Day review upon you! Technical first: "Never letting you out of its' sight.", the apostrophe needs to go. There isn't supposed to be ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a Review Day review upon you! Hmm....I found this poem's topic interesting, but it felt a little "random" after "I am from Julia Rene, late ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow another Review Day review! First of all, this is a poem, not a short story. Second, technical stuff. "Yeah you sitting at this computer. You're ...

I accidentally submitted that without meaning to. Apparently hitting Enter while the review field is gray will do that to you. Anyway, to pick up where I left off... He ...