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Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "But no no my dear, you’re an Indian south African girl…", this is the only time you don't capitalize ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "A piece of dry and crusted toothpaste is left on her green and pearl toothbrush in her rush to ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "In the middle of an abyss sleep.", the "abyss" should be "abysmal", just to make it feel and flow better. "In the disguise of ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Apparently I didn't see the part 12 sitting right underneath part 13, so I'll review this now and then try ...

Knight Dragon, here to review for Review Day! Let me start out by saying I have not read any of the previous parts. That does not mean I can't give ...

Knight Dragon, here to say...I'm extremely puzzled. Did you take this down to edit it? You should let readers know by changing the title to "down for editing" or "removed" ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical first: " Many of the fair folk, also, muttered amongst themselves as their king and queen led them through ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this glorious Review Day! Technical first: "of the moon like plastic soda tops", I need a period after "tops". And please capitalize the first ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! First off, I don't know who Bon Iver is, but I liked this poem. You had great imagery, and though ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "But I knew—I knew what it felt like to lose", you should put a comma after "lose" [that comma ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a review upon your work on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "Mankind seduces rats." How does this fit into the poem? What does it mean? ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day, as requested! Well, let's get started. Technical: "He had retold the legends of the Six--six incredible super humans who led ...

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a review on Review Day! "Too much dancing, That I can't control." The rhythm starts to break down here. "Blowing my money on molly." This ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "The thin, curving, cavities lining your palm are your map to the subway." Why do you have a comma ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "She has Ambitions, Aspirations, desires, and Dreams." Why isn't "desires" capitalized like the rest of the items in that ...