dragonfphoenix

Knight Dragon, here to review! Okay, I just read the opening paragraph, and I had a few concerns. "A soldier of the Berzan army stood at his watch post, utterly ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "Somehow I’ve managed to survive through another night, which is now nothing short of a miracle, and even more incredibly, I’ve actually been able ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Um...you do realize Kita is a girl's name, right? Just wanted to give you a head's up. "I couldn't believe it; I was talking to ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "I was supremely concerned, confused and scared." This is purely a style choice, but you could technically put a comma after "confused." As is, ...

Knight Hannah! It's so good to see your clementine name up there on the screen.

Knight Dragon, here to review. Hmm...I like the concept, but it is a little rough. Lines that need focusing on for reading it top-to-bottom: And it is wrong to say ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Glad to see you got another piece up. Keep up the good work. Now, on to the review. Technical: "And it is also this same ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! I hope you can understand that, as a college student with finals looming next week, I don't have time to go back and read all ...

Knight Dragon, here to review. YES!!! Someone else who has Second Worlders! [Okay, stopping on the excitement train and linking to an explanation of that term: ] Okay, for an ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "An example where this saying would apply is in the cases of Kesha and Nicki Minaj" This runs into number agreement. You say you'll ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! First off, this post is really long and it makes it harder to review that way. Now, I understand you're new to the site and ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "I couldn't accept that the world rested on plates until it cracked open spilling molten substances into the big zero." I felt like these ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! First off, on the Twilight note, you do realize that Laurent is the name of one of the vampires in that series, right? And you ...

Knight Dragon, here to review for the Knights of the Green Room, Order of the Dragons. Technical: There were several lines that didn't match up with the overall rhythm pattern. ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Welcome to YWS! Feel free to check out the Knights of the Green Room. Now, on to the review. Technical: "The man said to me, ...