dommy65

Hey Suzanne, My throat was closed tighter than the legs of a Christian who thought she could find God through abstinence. I love that metaphor so much!! Let me start ...

Really good start. Just start a new paragraph between speakers, it was a little confusing. Also, in the beginning, then you introduced the friends it was a bit confusing. You ...

Okay. First of all you have a lot of grammar mistakes going on, like missing commas, periods and some quoting issues. When two people are having a dialogue skip likes ...

I really liked this poem it gave me chills. I loved how when you read the first line you believe it's about marriage then the last line just blows you ...

I despise people who could even think about doing that to any person :evil: on your story; the descriptions were great and the reader can totally get a sense of ...

Your main character is totally relatable, I've been in that situation and know exactly how she feels! It's a total bummer for her and I can't wait to see how ...

I really liked this. It made me think about what i would think was more important, my own life or other's who i didnt even like. It was really good. ...

I love this poem the imagery is amazing and I love how you linked thunder to so many different things. I liked how the rythm changed it was like nothing ...

This is also really really late but I just have to give my opinion on this essay. That essay was written so nicely, I could feel your emotion through it. ...

This is a really good start for a story. Making allison scared and worried makes in the begining her vulnerable and relatable. I think this has great potential and besides ...