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Blast you Rascal. You've got me into this! Thanks a lot! But, I have to say, this just keeps getting better and better. But not quite perfect.....yet! He stilled his ...

Ouch!! Hiya there! I'm Lucy. I liked this, it was very very good. I didn't really see anything wrong! Great job! I really liked it and it was good in ...

Mmm, this was an interesting story. It seems kinda Harry Potterish, LOTRish. But that's ok. The small house I lived in imploded, with wood shards flying everywhere. I ducked instinctively, ...

Hey!!! I wanna say real quick, I love the Lucy name. It's awesome. Like Holly, I really didn't see much stuff to nitpick. But I do want to talk about ...

Hi yumyums, I can see you're a new member, so welcome! Before I start, I want to say, you need to have 2 reviews for every story you post. It's ...

Hey Leth, this isn't that bad. I like it! I only saw one teeny tiny thing. Boon snapped zenzen's reins and they quickly began to move forward, quickly moving faster ...

I agree, it's very good. But not perfect. :D First of all, I want to say that you need to keep a 2:1 ratio with Literary stuff. You need to ...

Well, this part is pretty good too. :D It's really coming along. But there are some things that need to be sorted out. Once she was positive he was gone ...

Interesting story. Kinda Twilightish, but don't get me wrong, it was good. :D But I have a few nit-picks for you. But my nit-picks are about your characters. So we ...

Okay, this is an interesting story. but it's really looooooonngg! :D Even though you say not to read this, you scare reveiwers away! We don't like reviewing looooonnnggg storys. But ...

Wow. I really liked this story. So well written! :D But, not quite perfect.....yet. :wink: “This isn’t right Jay should be here.” You need a comma after right. This isn't ...

Wow, this was pretty good. One thing though, this was really llllllllllllloooooooooooooonnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnngggggggg. :D It makes it really hard to review, but I will anyway! :D So, my job in reviewing ...

Hey! This story is very good. I'm really enjoying it. Umm, there are some teeny-tiny things that need to be fixed though. "What are you doing here?" he asked thoughtfully, ...

Well, this was a very good story. I really enjoyed it. But, like Rosey said, it's confusing to tell who is speaking and what's what. But don't worry, it's a ...

Hi Sela! :D Your story was quite interesting. Now, I don't do the whole nit-pick stuff. I talk about the characters. Now, I won't go too into detail unless you ...