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I love your story, and am looking foreward to the next bit!!! It's really good, well done, and KEEP WRITING! To Quote Cher: "Gay people are gay for a reason. ...

LOL !! Cool story, you don't see many stories about drugs nd all like this around here! Basically JF has said everything regarding editing! JF's reviews are the best, seriously. ...

[quote="krazykoreandevil"] URN slowly opened his eyes, and groaned as he slowly rose to his feet. He grimaced, and prepared himself for another attack. His tired, weak arms tried to form ...

:D I've commented on this before but I simply HAD to come back and read it again !! It's hilarious ! :wink: Xxx Do

Hey :D I like your writing, although it was slightly confusing at one point.. Overall it's good and interesting, are you going to develop it more ?? I think this ...

"So, what is it?" asked Jacobe as he looked at the present his father had bestowed upon him."Anything you want it to be, just love yourself, and your famliy."Said his ...

This is pretty good, but you don't have any type of clear ending. It just kind of... stops in the middle of things. I'd advise you to add to it ...

I really like this piece !! It's well written. It kind of makes you expect that someone died or fell seriously ill/had an accident, etc. It was a big surprise ...

This is really good! :D It's interesting how you display the thoughts, and your choice of words is very good. Just one comment: These four words: Home.Atonement.Time.Empathy. Space them out ...

Hey :D I really like the story, it's really good! Great diction :lol: It's fun to read, and you nicely developped the characters, beginning with one's point of view and ...

Its pretty good!! All I think you need to do is read over it and make sure sentences flow well and make sense, and maybe develop the characters slightly more, ...

It's a cool story, and the title Wonderful, with what the creature says at the end, is nicely thought of! The other reviewer gave all actual review comments, so i'll ...

Really nice, good buildup of tension ! I like how you repeat the "telling a tale" part, the repetition adds to the eerie mood :D It sounds like it'll be ...