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Since this is a bit long for my attention span, I will say the first three paragraphs were really good. But no critique since I didnt finish. But I will ...

*slick jimmy slaps the softside of elbow, and rocks to and fro* Dude. these words are..... Hey wait a minute, aren't most opiates yellowish in color? hehe, you said tit. ...

Hey Lexy. I opened this in antipation that it was about the member of the month MYTH. We all love Myth, yaay. But then I read what you wrote and ...

day concedes to night concedes to day, This line sounds familiar. Do you realise that I started to read faster on the second verse? I think it was the words. ...

Just a note- According to dictionary.com: Cliche'- a phrase or word that has lost its original effectiveness or power from overuse In a poem, cliche is circumstantial. Since this entire ...

interesting? YES! Acceptable? NO! This is an exciting concept you have here, but difficult to pull off. As a reader, I had trouble with the voice, and the emphasis. ewwww, ...

ok, here is my thought on this.... Interperative? Song? Crap? This was VERY easy to read through (less the grammer and puctuation that brad spoke of), and VERY interesting to ...

ok, I agree with ani, but on a more severe scale. I acthidently bit my toungue from reading thith, and it ith now bleeding, justh a little. But it hurtth ...

I was about to read this, but then stopped. You can't toute it as an awaard winning poem and not reveal to us the award. I loved the last poem ...

This is very close to amazing. it really hits home for me since I am newly divorced and miss my five year old son every second of the day. I ...

teeheehee, thats not how you spell colors. *silly australian* Anyway, I liked, and was a bit confused by paragraph 2 also. I think wiggy suggestion would help but also you ...

OK. Lets all remember what we are talking about here. Patriotism, and the results from lack of such. From reading almost everyones critiques on other posts, grammer, flow, rhythym, and ...

ummm.... um. Attempt at romance? kindaza. sounds. romantic like-ish, sorta- maybe. I think "blend" is totally the wrong word to finish this off with. Try one of the following: me'nage ...

(Do I have a void?) Ok, was this the final line of the poem? Or are trying to ask us to figure out what purpose your poetry fulfills in your ...

this piece is very very interesting, nice concept. But it confused me alot, and I dont think is is merely because Im a little bit thick in the head. I ...