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for me, the ending was a tad anti-climactic because the mood of the poem was rather intense but then the intensity gradually decreased. but at the same time, it worked ...

Hi, DarknessSurroundsMe! Welcome to YWS. I remember when I first joined, I felt good when I posted my first piece of writing and got a cheery little welcome. So, here's ...

Hi there! I have a few suggestions/questions, so here they are: 1.) Was this meant to be a rant? Because if it was, then the topic-jumping would be appropriate. Rants ...

Hi there! I have a few suggestions. 1.) There are a few spelling errors, so it might be a good idea to run through your poem real quick. 2.) If ...

Unique poem. Straight to the point. Expresses your point of view, Doesn't push your opinion Some poets do that The only thing I would suggest is... Why not convert this ...

Hi, this was very uplifting. loved it. the poem, the rhyming, the imagery it brought on, everything. stupendous! who says poems have to be all fancy and deep? yours had ...

Hi there! :) Your story was one of those deep, soulful ones. I liked it. I don't know if you're going to make something more of it, but if you ...

Good bit of writing you have here. The scenario you laid down in your story encouraged visualization because of the strong descriptions. Excellent job on that. I was a bit ...

Your short story, "An endless dream" was riveting. You lured me into Cecilia's never-ending dream world...not missing one detail of the ocean, the waves, the island, the old man, and ...

Personally, your story seems like a whirlwind of good ideas! Yet they're a bit disheveled and unorganized. If the girl is moving to a small coastal city with her dad ...