deavarna_satina

I enjoyed this poem immensly. It was short and sweet, but the wording flowed easily and the pain portrayed felt very real. I find rhyming often spoils poems, but you ...

Wow. That was... a truely great read! Your expression and description were fantastic and I particularly like the way you captured the repressed emotions of Rachel. Also loved you character ...

It has potential. The story line was good, and it's left me eagerly awaiting the next installment. My only suggestions are use more description and proof read it a few ...

I agree with previous reviews here. I would like a little more description and 'showing' the scenes. The idea of the story is good and there were some lovely expressive ...

Typos happen to us all :-) I think what you've written is excellent. The subtle humour and good use of language really make it an enjoyable read. And it is ...

What a prologue, it has certainly sparked my interest. The mistakes seem to have already been pointed out in previous posts, so I wont bore you by goiing over them ...