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Re: Wrath Of The Heart Prt.1
Hey Huff Puff! First of all, I want to welcome you to YWS. Remember for next time, post at least two reviews before posting your own piece. It really helps ...
Feb 8, 2009 -
Re: This Town Doesn't Have Sidewalks
Well, Ms. Penn, I have some news for you: this was EXPLOSIVE! :D I'm not sure if words can express how much I loved this piece. The intonation was top-notch ...
Feb 8, 2009 -
Re: The Happy
OH my, anti-pop! Can I shower you in my praise? Marvelous. Extraordinary. Love it. :] I can't help but be happy reading this piece. You are an incredible poet. This ...
Feb 8, 2009 -
Re: Poem for a Fallen Soldier
I think this is a very sad subject on which you are refering to. There too many fallen soldiers, too many lives lost. It's very thoughtful to be paying the ...
Feb 8, 2009 -
Re: Poem
I thought this piece was okay. I know it takes a lot of courage to get your first piece posted, so I'm going to try my best to be extra ...
Feb 8, 2009 -
Re: my newspaper
To be honest, I was a bit confused by your poem. It didn't lead me in any direction. Usually, many writers who post poetry here are missing a key element. ...
Feb 6, 2009 -
Re: Luck and Jealousy
Before I start my review, I just want to remind you about the 2:1 rule that applies at YWS. 2 reviews for every 1 piece you post. :] It looks ...
Feb 6, 2009 -
Re: My Poetry-Mist
Overall, I thought this was a good piece. I have some notes though. First of all, there are some rules here YWS that are important to follow. So every story ...
Feb 6, 2009 -
Re: More
Hey God! I never thought that I would die so young. . .wait, never mind. :wink: Sorry, that was my attempt at a joke. Failed. Anyway, here is my review. ...
Feb 5, 2009 -
Re: Broken, destroyed, and defeated.
Hmmm. . very true. I tend to repeat this poem in my mind almost everyday. "Who am I?" It's a repeating theme seen often in every day life. I liked ...
Feb 5, 2009 -
Re: Seek Not My Heart
Wow. This absolutely positively AMAMZING! :] Very rarely do I come across a poem that I do not have a critique for. Well, today, I have. This poem is very ...
Feb 4, 2009 -
Re: Alcohol
This poem portrays very well the seductive personality of alchol. I think this poem is really good, and have only a few critiques. Wherever you go, you hear me, I ...
Feb 4, 2009 -
Re: When it's too late (revised)
Overall, I think this was a good poem. It does need some editing though. Here are my critiques: Who hope that one day they can take their own lives Who ...
Feb 4, 2009 -
Re: Feelings Don't Last Forever
This is a great piece. I love the topic. It's slightly over-used in general, but I think you've got a good start. Here are my critiques: First of all, try ...
Feb 3, 2009 -
Re: Words
This piece is really good and it has a lot of potential. I only have a few critiques. I look at myself from the world’s perspective and feel so ashamed ...
Feb 3, 2009
