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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Christmas

    Coloured candy canes hung off its thick branches. I listened to the Christmassy songs happily. Breathing in , I could smell the delicious Christmas dinner cooking. A turkey bulged with ...

    Oct 22, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Shadows

    I love this poem. It is a unique reflection of the stillness in life. Keep it up. In the deathly silence of the night, Shadows creep out From the closet ...

    Oct 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Our Stalock

    I like it. It is different for sure and funny; as well as very loyal to the team . I like the fact it sounds like a song, or at ...

    Oct 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Suns Betrayal

    Wow. Great poem. Love the intensity in the tone and how it is used to create emotional responses. The poem itself displays the talent possessed by the author, who i ...

    Oct 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Filled

    overall great poem. The sun bearing down on the river We watch the water stand still, I want to remember The way your eyes kill. The way your eyes doth ...

    Oct 21, 2011
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Added Scene, WOLF BROTHER

    He was just lying there. Doing nothing. Torak’s dad was on the hard, cobbled ground with dig marks and slashes across his face. Torak felt helpless, with himself in immense ...

    Oct 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Black Bird

    Nothing more than an amazing poem. nothing needs to be changed for this to be better. I understand everything said and can identify with what you said. This is talent ...

    Oct 21, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Good Seed: Part 3

    Food, after a lack-thereof, is a powerful narcotic. My body floods with endorphins, every part of me blushes and flutters. The air sweeps over my skin in Technicolor, cool bursts ...

    Oct 20, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: deleted

    “I’ll stop being an evil bastard when it stops making you laugh.” I stopped laughing abruptly, and he frowned. “Dyl...” I hesitated, but his hazel eyes urged me to go ...

    Oct 19, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Down the road.

    The dream was the same as it always was lately. Three days without a shower and even in his sleep he could smell feet and feverish sweat, but still the ...

    Oct 18, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: A Void

    The walls have trapped me Contained inside a void Your "wisdom" is ignorance You prey off people's fears But your strengths aren't my weaknesses Your long gaze into a lifeless ...

    Oct 18, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Chapter One part 2 and Chapter 2 part 1

    The only person who met my eyes on my way to the library was a boy, about 11 years of age, covered with dust and grime, hair brown and eyes ...

    Oct 18, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: We All Have A History Behind

    was waiting for it; I knew that he would come back for me. It’s not just a dream when you see yourself haunted, it is being haunted even if you’re ...

    Oct 18, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Chapter Two

    Overall, a wonderful story; cannot wait for the next chapter.I fixed the misspellings for you. For the hundredth time, Anna, I couldn’t help it! You had to move! I wasn’t ...

    Oct 18, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: Taking the miracle of words for granted

    Tranquility was born on the 21st of September 1994 in a small hospital in Britain. She was half an ounce above being declared underweight and that half ounce was probably ...

    Oct 18, 2011


The bigger the issue, the smaller you write. Remember that. You don’t write about the horrors of war. No. You write about a kid’s burnt socks lying on the road. You pick the smallest manageable part of the big thing, and you work off the resonance.
— Richard Price