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The boy has fallen in love and has been dumped; so now he is a lonely puppy with a broken heart. Feeling he can't go a week without someone, he ...

If you open up with,"the boy has fallen in love and has got dumped", for grammatical purposes change the "got" to "has been" dumped.

Great poem. Ok so I absolutely love the rhyme and flow that this possesses. You write in such grace and with such eloquence, nor review is necessary because it is ...

Title of the poem is unique and i like that. Forever and a Day and a Half Each day will pass, Like an eternity of Not seeing your face Not ...

You said you wanted to say something about the beginning of your poem and quite sincerely I am rather amused and amazed at the first stanza. I saw an accurate ...

A Spermatozoon I am one of the billions he created. My brothers say, “Surely, he made each of us for a purpose. He loves us. We are his children.” I'm ...

beautiful poem in all honesty.... love the title.....Purple Walls I feel so out of place, here among my possessions. These purple walls are so familiar, yet so foreign to me ...

Your love was worth the sun and the moon , nice intro I hoped that you would kiss me soon , But when I looked into your eyes, peering into ...

I absolutely adore the last stanza, and the use of GOD in the lines. It was unique and simple and using God has been lost in the modern writings of ...

I love how you end the chapter with a question? Evolution brings change but not all changes are good…. Are they? Other things i would like to comment on were ...

I like this story. I have not read the other two chapters but do plan to. Before I go on, the viewpoint is amazing and was spot on. I did ...

The Mariner's Revenge “Mamma?” My voice trembled as I pressed my face to the wooden banister, peering between the slats at her. “I’m off then!” Charles piped, all chipper as ...

Great poem. I love the face that you did not make it rhyme, i like this type of poetry as well. Water floods my soul Pools lie in my sight ...

In my life I have driven past dozens, possibly even hundreds of car crash sites. The flowers and cards laid out on the road, the broken pieces of the car ...

optional spelling misspelling spelling error Everything's So Tender Now I found your name on my hand Written down with a pen The ink is like a tattoo of shame Hiding ...