darko.demark666

What fool Icarus for trying to be a man too long while clinging tight to his boyish bravado. Unworthy of his wings he’s too far gone, too high on pride ...

Welcome to YWS! Sorry, but this is total cxxp.... No rhythm, just scrabble of words and nothing more. Your verses are "hitting" each other (eg. Hand in his --warm-- Warm ...

Hahahaha...nice...I liked it... These politicians really make us unhappy with their fame of being rich and successful cause they're...nothing actually. Onto your work: 1. I loved the: Title,style,genr

.....I'm not sure of this....I'm a fan of rhyme so I don't like your poem. 2nd, you have nice thoughts, contrasts, comparisons and metaphors but without that you got nothing. ...

Nice stuff.....I like the theme ... 1st stanza 3rd verse: stand between anger? How can you stand between one thing? 2nd stanza 4th verse: Nice caption with "Power", but tie ...

Mighty hand of God crashed down scattering faithful all around screams cut through the dark and gloom echoes from the massive tomb What happened to the commas, fullstops,...? Eden destroyed ...

Can an angel be of leather hide? without question Or does divine lend exclusive path? Why shan't an angel brave the raging tide ? what does it means? question mark ...

I think that your concept is a bit much of it....this doesn't belong to poetry for its style... I mean, this ruins your rhythm totally...actually there isn't any rhythm... This ...

Nice (really nice) poem... I noticed too many words that have similar meanings like Snoink said "dance"...also what does the title have with the poem actually??? R'n'R is very good... ...

Wow....How many historical persons...and all for nothing... What is theirs role in this poem??? You put lines as you wish so it don't make sense. Also, why are you using ...

1- Has no meaning 2- Plenty of rhymes, but useless in meaning. 3- Not to be offenseive, isnt called poetry, It's called 'rhyme as much as you can' xD ~ ...

This truth is like a sea [s]that has[/s] no shore, ...with... Original idea... Chaos infinite in heart and mind: That you should once have been, and are no more. without ...

Put your foot in your mouth, boy; You can't tell me you're sorry. [s]But[/s] I don't care for your lies. I'm over it, over you. So now I smile, Skip ...

I think that there are parts of this poem that definitely need work, but I was in a playful mood this morning, so I decided to write this, in the ...

First of all, I agree with "kissthewitch" about rhyme. The sunset creates a halo on your hair The pieces of my heart shed on my face (end of the line) ...