darchoco

Well... that gave me chills. I can relate very heavily on this story; it is almost scary. The dark visualization grabbed me, and I felt like I was there again, ...

I really like the free flow of the poem. It is a very mature, surrealistic poem, and I have to admit I was a bit surprised by your age. The ...

how long is has been since this website... ANYWAY!!! I must agree with LxnderSpeck. While the story concept itself, and the message behind it, is an entertaining idea, it is ...

alright quick notes to this.... there was a large, wooden wardrobe with all the baby's clothes in it. There was a large, wooden hamper for all the babies’ toys to ...

defintiely has some heavy potential. One i have to say besides the nevelle deal, everyone had no emotion while heromoine was just a giant crying machine. You need to put ...

i love how powerful the emotion is. while seemingly simple in wording, it has a powerful metaphorical sense to it. Its a heart wrencher thats for sure. I want to ...

like the look of the story. but a quick word of advice, descriptions are important, no matter what. you need to separate the characters out more. pretend i have no ...

hey us guys arent that heartless!!!! ... at least I'm not... well, like its been said, the beginning is kind of rocky, and is more like a statement. Work on ...

simply put... absolutely love it. It's original, different, emotional, excellently positioned, good for a tune. only one bone to pick. It needs more. If actually converted into a song, it ...

just saying, As a lyric writer myself, I can kinda imagine the music to this. Kinda. Unfortunately, I see more of a ranting with rhymes rather than a true lyrical ...

agreeing with berrylique here. The title spelling pushed me away, you might want to watch that. Other than that and the spelling errors, you did an excellent job in expressing ...

I love the concept of this. However, there are a few things necessary to point out... is there a rhyme scheme to this? I can see some vaguely but it ...

holy crud. This is unbelievably good. This story makes me want to go adn write for days until I am able to get within 50% of getting to that kind ...