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Re: The Story Of Summer (Ch. 6): Fighting Off Fate
Hello! So, review time! 'Crystal throws the nail file to her right. She takes out her Phone and plays with it, rolling to her left, aware of the piece of ...
Aug 3, 2014 -
Re: A War With No End Chapter 5
Okay. Hardest part of this: It was near impossible for me to red. It was all one paragraph, and really should have been in more than one. One solid block ...
Aug 3, 2014 -
Re: Zombies Don't Jump... CHAPTER TWO
Okay, review time! '“Well he is human.” She sarcastically gruffed and rolled her eyes.' Okay (I use that word a lot, by the way), this doesn't really look right. Firstly, ...
Aug 3, 2014 -
Re: The Veil - Chapter 12 Part 2
Hello! I see this has no reviews, so I thought I'd drop by. 'She slipped behind a gauze curtain that stretched across the room, blurring one third of the room.' ...
Jul 30, 2014 -
Re: Another World
"The cave fills with the light of the setting sun. The sun setting over the ice capped mountains is beautiful it also a sign that nightfall is near." Okay, so ...
Jul 29, 2014 -
Re: lost Lilly of Lilliput
I really like this poem. I get the idea that it is some kind of ancient times slavery trade thing? Okay, criticism time! Now, I don't know very much about ...
Jul 29, 2014 -
Re: Love Poem No. 3
This is a very nice poem. I like your use of similes, and your metaphors are very nice. A great poem, and I would very much like to see more ...
Jul 28, 2014 -
Re: Remember our pattern
Wow. This is just ... fantastic! I love how well you've conveyed the word we live in today, the world of technology. There were a couple of grammatical errors, such ...
Jul 28, 2014 -
Re: And No One There Saw Him Cry
This was fantastic. You kept me interested the entire way through, and I was especially intrigued by the sentence, "Such a waste, he thought, to kill a man so strong ...
Jul 28, 2014 -
Re: Final Destination Chapter 12 (Edited)
Okay, hello there! This is my first review, and I'm not really all that critical of ideas and such, but I think I'm okay with grammar. Anyway, I'm rambling. To ...
Jul 28, 2014 -
Re: Don't venture into woods of night...
This is a very good poem. I do not generally like poetry, but this was very gripping. The repetitiveness of the 'Unless you want our soul shattered.' line is great, ...
Jul 26, 2014
