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I'm actually not good at reviewing poems, but I'll give it a shot. Like the other reviewer said, this poem is short, so there's nothing to really criticize. Personally, I ...

Honestly, there's nothing much to edit in this chapter. Kyre's emotions are painfully clear. I was really scared he was going to hit the ground, not that landing on a ...

Please correct me if I'm wrong again...This poem is about a girl who likes living where she is, but she's had feelings for a boy with serious wanderlust, and she's ...

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There's nothing much to edit in this chapter. But perhaps the last sentence could be a bit more dramatic? Or maybe using ellipses might help it sound more alarming. And ...

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I've never reviewed a rap before...I can't help but wonder what beat this uses. Anyway, the verses are powerful and clear enough to express what you're feeling, which a lot ...

The any chance, is the narrator...Anyhow, this short story is lovely. Your writing style is clear and easy to understand. The way you described the speaker's emotions is very convincing, ...

This is a great poem. The sentiments of the speaker are expressed without sounding over-sentimental. This whole work actually feels more like prose than poetry because of the structuring, but ...

I haven't read the previous chapters, but this chapter was fun to read even without any previous knowledge of the story. I liked how a large chunk of this chapter ...

I haven't read the previous chapters yet, but this chapter is amazing even without readers' prior knowledge. Your writing style is wonderfully descriptive. It feels like the scene in this ...

The suspense in this chapter is great. I personally found the soldier to be a discriminatory, rude idiot. If that's not how you meant to portray him, then please excuse ...

Indeed, who says we have to be anything? I personally find the "favorite food" and "favorite color" questions weird myself. We could have more than one of each. Your poem ...

I'm afraid I'm not a good reviewer...But I've just got to say this. You're awesome. If you watched anime while growing up, wrote fanfics, self insert novels, and can recognize ...

This is a wonderful re-telling of Cinderella. I liked the names you chose for the stepsisters, and the backstory you imagined for them and their mother seemed like a good ...