dahlia58

I thought this was out of the green room already...Well, no time like the present. I just spent a whole day using my brain, so pardon me if my review's ...

The last line is my favorite in this whole poem. The speaker seems to want to die quietly if the world does end soon. Either that, or they're convinced that ...

I haven't reviewed many scripts before, but since I know you're really good at your craft, I read this. Yikes, Esther sure is desperate for job connections...I'm glad she has ...

I've heard of minimalist poems, and I'm wondering if this is an example. You set this short poem as a romantic work. So am I correct to assume that the ...

This chapter definitely made me look forward to part two. Let me know when it comes out. I haven't read many retellings of fairytales, but this one is good, that ...

Cody is a surprisingly calm child if I've ever seen one...The new character Maria is already intriguing. Her eyes and behavior seem tough in a good way. So that watch ...

A glitch made my review get posted twice.

I like the insightfulness of this poem. Falling in love may be impossible for a meticulous person. It's too risky. The only two things I suggest is replacing the "jump" ...

So it was her mother...Or at least the memory of her mother Georgia still has in her head? The left and right brain personality concept is interesting. I liked how ...

This chapter was pretty short, so there's not much to criticize. The narrative is very well-organized and clear, and the physical descriptions you gave of the sisters were helpful. They ...

There is palpable suspense in this chapter. I liked how the new character Callan is introduced. His actions make it clear he's not a bad person. The only main suggestion ...

Is your style based on the light novel genre? The narrative gives off similar vibes to LN's I've read in the past. Charlotte's reaction to entering an alternate universe was ...

This was a great story! I would love to read another told from the boy's point of view. That would clear up a lot of the mystery going on here. ...

Eww...I hate slushy snow too. It's just gross, no other way to describe it. This poem is really short, so there's nothing much to edit. I'd suggest capitalizing the beginnings ...

So Duncan and Julia married after all! (A slight typo near the beginning: "bed" became "bead.") Callie and Evan seem like sweet kids. ^^ This chapter itself has no huge ...