It was a feather floating down, it looked beautiful, I wanted to keep it.
It seems I took too long to contemplate picking up this plumage, for when I looked down the feather was gone.
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Hi! Thanks for sharing this short albeit very meaningful poem involving a descending feather that the speaker tells us he or she attempted to grasp because of its beauty, but which he failed to do because it suddenly vanished. Hesitancy is blamed for it.
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One thing that I notice, is that the feather is allowed it to reach the ground or floor before attempting to grasp it. Why not reach for it as it is descending?
Too mesmerized? Second thoughts about if it is really worth it? Fear that it is a lure for leading to a deadly trap? The reasons are not given, yet these two remain viable explanations.
What might the ground and disappearance symbolize?
Well, it obviously was associated with the feather's vanishing since it was still intact while available up in the air or up for grabs. Could the ground symbolize a time limit such as lifespan? Or a date in which the feather could no longer be geographically available due to relocation?
What does the feather symbolize. Well, it might symbolize a beautiful opportunity or a beautiful person. Either one will do,
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It was a feather floating down[.] it looked beautiful[.] I wanted to keep it.
....for when I looked down the feather was gone[,]....
I've heard of minimalist poems, and I'm wondering if this is an example. You set this short poem as a romantic work. So am I correct to assume that the feather symbolizes the one the speaker has feelings for? At least from my perspective, the speaker wanted to try confessing to the person they like, but they never did and it was too late. If this isn't the meaning you intended, pardon me...
I think that this poem is great and has a lot of potentials.
I don't see how anything in the poem that would label it as romantic.
When the narrator said that the feather was beautiful, you could have added more description of what he/she saw. As far as shape, colors and size for feathers come in a variety of all of these.
The poem could be a little longer at least two stanzas though this poem is entirely yours so it is your choice.
Overall I loved it!
idk why but i just really like the use of the word plumage. great word choice.
In Spanish the word for feather is Pluma and for feathers it's plumas. Curiously, in Spanish a pen is called a pluma. Harks back to when actual feathers were being used as pens.
This kind of reminds me of the old sayings like "strike while the iron is hot" or "make hay while the sun shines" or whatever...
It's happened again! Little help @Jaybird?
Fixed!