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Thanks for the critique--I don't usually write with any form in mind, and this just came out as is. Normally I only write poetry, as I start to flounder with ...

Thank you all for your comments! :) This was more of a spur of the moment poem, something I'm hoping to develop further. I used lots of quotes from various ...

Every other line was supposed to be indented. X( it didn't come out, and it seems a bit choppy now. w/e. tell me what you think.

i know haha! i like your avatar... reminds me of a poem my friend wrote, called "Cake, Not Hate". funny stuff.

thank you all for the lovely comments! this was just a sort of brain-dump kind of poem, and is actually a part of a larger compilation of thoughts, (which is ...

Yes, that was exactly what I was trying to get across. You learn to live with sorrow in the same way you learn to live without wings. Do you have ...

I love this stanza, it's beautiful— Lonely handed me a painting I hung it on my wall A painting of a girl just sitting Watching dark red rain fall. BEAUTIFUL. ...

This is gorgeous-- "wandering, oh To be more like you Behind the barricade we all wish To watch the stars And dance with the night" That last half was really ...

Thank you all so much for the feedback! It means a lot. :D cx

This is nice, it feels very open, very clear. I liked the "sky" and "fly" connection also, it's really cool. Good job! cx

I like this a lot, it has rhythm and character. The length is just right, it keeps the attention and makes an impression. Nice job! cx

Thanks everyone--I really appreciate your honesty, as I've shown this to several friends and they haven't been any help at all as far as real feedback goes. I probably won't ...

This is such a cool poem—took me three readings to completely digest it. Love the last two lines.