crestfallen

I really like this song and thought it was really funny. I didn't quite understand why you had to use so much repetition because it only made the lyric twice ...

Too cliche' and sickingly not original like the other person said. Also you should say it's your "first love" more like a "First crush" We as teenagers have no true ...

Nice Job!!! I prefer the morbid type of lyrics rather than the lovey dovey ones. The only thing I didn't like was the introduction at the beginning. It's no fun ...

This was a pretty well written lyric for a first time lyric. There also is not a "rule of thumb" when it comes to writing a lyric or chorus. I ...

It was okay, I didn't care much for the parts in which you'd say "For losing you" it just didn't seem proper to use "for" when you could have used ...

wow I can't believe I'm the only one who didn't like this. I understand because your a teen and all that you felt that a song lyric like this would ...

I agree with this person...."This is great Jashy, I really enjoyed it. Your lines were meaningfull. My favourite was the video thingy. Now I want to know who is who. ...

I agree with whoever said this... "The lyrics should be more descriptive, but very strong simplicity "I wanna curl up like a cat around you and just hold you tight" ...

why do people copy and paste the whole poem in their comments that they are making to the individual who wrote the poem. If they are doing that to increase ...

I agree with Razcood...I think that's the person's name. If you don't want to say the F word then don't put "F The world" that part of the song was ...

I wonder if you intend to sing the "Why can't you see" part like Tyler Swift or something. For some reason when I read that part of the song I ...