cmarie159

I think that you have something here, but you might want to work on the overall structure of the poem. It was enough to keep my attention from wandering, but ...

I agree with the punctuation, there needs to be some. The poem has a good rhythmic pattern. I really like the last line, about what's on your mind? don't you ...

I actually love the simplicity of this. there's probably improvement to be made here, but there IS something to be said about simple statements. it's back to the roots, in ...

Welcome to Chanelmarie's tour of the unknown, buckle your seatbelts and... oh shoot, wrong speech card! *shuffles* Ah, here we go. My name is Chanelmarie, and I will play the ...

I really liked this concept, the whole thing about the bad being within us. I found this rather witty, kind of reminding me a bit of clive barker. now i'm ...

Wow, this was, wow. I kind of almost started crying over that. The sad thing is, I think it's more than one in six. It's the fact in high school ...

This was pretty good. Truthfully though, I found myself staring into space, just like the character. The first paragraph was pretty good, and so was the second, but after it ...

haha so um, guess who hit the reply button this time? =D This was absolutely amazing. I thought the not leaving the paint to dry thing was awesome. You are ...

0.o wow. All I can say is wow. I agree with your concepts of religion completely, and the irony of the "Sunshine" song? Pure genius. Your vocabulary is absolutely SPECTACULAR! ...

I think this is pretty intelligent. It's witty, and makes you think "what exactly did that priest lie about? It's one of those that make you think. Like Ernest Hemingway's ...

I don't think the sun is going to literally kill them. Rather, it's the thought of staying in this world another day. They want the easy way out, or rather, ...

I definitely think this story was amazing. It touched me on a personal level, since my grandfathers are actually gay, and it was really sweet. It really showed the innocence ...