clive1

Overall, this has the best spelling, grammar and puctuation I have yet seen on YWS. Well done! Only two negative things for me. 'The first was the use of 'anytime ...

For me what makes a great poem is not whether it scans well, has rhymes or conforms to the rules of poetry, but whether the writer's heart was aflame when ...

I think some of my comments will echo others but here are my main thoughts. I think it is really important to get all the normal rules of grammar and ...

My 8 year old says this. I liked the dragon in the story. Marie's and the dragon's description was fabulous. When you used the word 'barred' do you really mean ...

Really very good - intriguing, suspenseful and gripping. Really! A few small comments. There are a number of small typos - for example 'I looked me right in the eyes'. ...

The stench of its mass was unbearable The use of the word 'mass' doesn't really work for me - how about 'body'? Also, I found the repetition of the theme ...

A great effort at 'olde englishe' to give the story a particular feel. However, quite often the wrong 'olde' word has been used. Also,it would be more attractive to read ...

The story fragment was really too short to get a feel of it, to develop themes, characterisations and plot lines. However, like your other stories (we, my daughter and I, ...

I too am a little confused about the various types of creatures and who are the immortals? I found the idea of an army behind a tree a little unrealistic. ...

My eight year old enjoyed this story. Here are her comments. This was a very touching story. I liked the way Rissa was so kind to the boy when he ...

My 8 year old read and reviewed, under close supervision, the story as follows: I like your description about Luke and Rory, I also thought the description of the dragon ...

My 8 year old loved this story. Here are her comments. I liked this story even though I didn't understand it that much. I liked this story because it used ...