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OMG! I loved it Ari. There was so much feeling. I didn't understand the last bit, screaming my name to the dead? Shouldn't it be to the death? It's great ...

Thanks for the crits. I made some changes.

I don't have time to do a proper critique because I have to go in a minute, but I really liked the idea of this poem, and with a bit ...

Okay, I just read the new bit. It was really sweet, the fuss they kicked up about being seperated. You made it very realistic and I could feel the pain. ...

I was confused. Was she in the future of something? There was a lot of dialouge, I used to make that mistake a lot. It would be good if you ...

Don't you think that would be better off in the poetry section? Otherwise it was good. Thoughtful and sweet. I'm sure a lot of people would like to do that ...

I can't wait to see it as a movie. It will be soooo cool. If anyone wants to talk about it, PM me! I want to talk to someone who ...

Sounds Good. Whose it by?

I've been trying to find a copy of this. I read Catalyst and really enjoyed it.

That was so creepy. I am so wishing I didn't read that. I want to eat a tub of ice-cream, a block of chocolate and read a very long book ...

Ok, I think some people might have been getting confused about this. The girl in my story doesn't have a twin! She is looking at her reflection in the mirror.

Interesting, interesting. The relationship between Taj and Kath is growing. I liked how you brought back the three thing. There hasn't been mention of that in this one until now... ...

Erm... I'm sorry but I wasn't really sure what you were supposed to be saying. There seems to be a lot of older words in there, so maybe that's why.

I liked the flashback, but I didn't like much else. I hope you update, because I'm sure it will get better.

Another great chapter, but for some reason I liked other ones more than this one. Oh well, I'll go and read chapter six now.