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Haha! That was so funny! I should try somethign like that sometime. Couldn't see any mistakes apart from you spelt jewllery wrong in one part. Great idea.

Hehe. They must have been nice markers! I know what that's like, but I go out and end up buying chocolate. I couldn't see any mistakes, it was just a ...

I liked this. I couldn't find any mistakes, and the way you wrote it was good. When is more coming?

Hmm... interesting. I can't say I loved the ending. I mean, it was good, but I just didn't love it. I'm not really sure how to explain it. I'll tell ...

I finally got around to editing this. I hope it's better, please tell me what you think!

It's good. But why do you post the chapter in two halves instead of the whole thign at once? The rest of the week passes us by without incident. Mother ...

Well I hope you get editor in cheif. That would be a great compliment. I thrive on compliments, which means it's good that my English teacher and family think my ...

Wow! Your teacher sounds horrible I hope it's better now. Can you give me some of those excuses so I can use them in maths and sport?

Haha! That was sooooooooooo funny!!!!!!!!!!

This is good. You have a very interesting life, I wouldn't mind living it. I want to do law too, though I have a few years still before university. Let ...

I liked it. The only thing I can complain about was some spelling and puncuation issues. Apart from that it was good. Sorry, but I don't have time for a ...

Hmm... I really don't know what to say. I guess I'll start off with what I liked. Jill is a good character, you did a good job with her. You ...

Thanks for the comments. I'll fix it up as soon as I get enough time!

Ahh... what would this world be without random things? Boring, that;s what the world would be without random things. Very, very boring.

Wow! I didn't know you posted part 7. Could you PM me when you post part 8, so I know? The formatting was better, it made it much easier to ...