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Yay!!! Lyla's back! Fortunately, I think I got it, although has Cal been mentioned before? I don't remember there being a Cal previously. I should read the rest again. Now, ...

I didn't really like this. I couldn't hear any tune and it just didn't flow very well. You've made some of the lines very awkward. Take this one, for example: ...

Hey. I'm really sorry if this happened to you. I don't think this flowed very well. I couldn't get the feel for any rhythm, and I feel the letter really ...

Well, I'll do my best with this but it's been a while since I critiqued, and a very long time since I did a script. There's just one thing I’d ...

Well, I'm going to be a little more critical than the people above me. I couldn't put a tune to this. It's something I always stress with lyrics. If I ...

Are you new to this songwriting thing? Because this was pretty good. Simple, yes, and a little hard to sing at times, but overall it's a very good job. The ...

It's a bit short, but it's kind of cute. It doesn't really seem like the kind of thing kinda kids would sing, though. It's a bit... random. fast} I would ...

Well, I saw that this has been sitting here for ten days with no replies, and I haven't done a critique for two weeks (school, ugh!), so I clicked on ...

More great writing! And for somebody who thinks these types of celebrities get way to much media attention who doing stupid things and is very interested in the drug world, ...

This is really good. I loved your tone and how it was half fiction/half non-fiction. I don't know a lot about ballet, despite having lived with ballerinas for years and ...

Hi. Before I critique this I'd like to tell you about our two for one reviewing policy here. I see that you've already posted something and only done one review. ...

This was pretty good. A light, fun read that I enjoyed. I like Kate even though we're polar opposites. (Okay, so I've done some bad stuff too, but not that ...

This was okay. Not the best thing I've read, but it's not terrible. It's a little random, but it's good for a laugh. I thought the ending was really funny. ...

To be honest, this wasn't the best piece of writing I've seen. There were a lot of mistakes (easy to pick up if you go through it carefully but I'll ...

This was quite good. I don't know much about this side of the war (although I'm very interested in finding out more) so I can't really correct much of your ...