Published July 13, 2008
We all say
Hello
We all say
fast}are you sick, gotta go
Ah oh ah oh
Mm mm Mm mm
We all say
good day
We all say
fast}see you an another day
Mm mm Mm mm
Ah oh Ah oh
We all say
get well
We all say
fast}Hope you're felin' better now
Mm oh Mm oh
Ah mm Ah mm
We all say
Nice to see ya' now
It's supposed to be sung in a sing song voice and I didn't know how to um.. put down in words the humming and the ah and oh's. The Mm to mm means it goes from a more high hum to a lower hum. I hope this makes some sense.
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It's a bit short, but it's kind of cute. It doesn't really seem like the kind of thing kinda kids would sing, though. It's a bit... random.
I would get rid of these. They really threw me off so I couldn't sing it smoothly. And I didn't like the lines that were meant to be sung fast. When I tried, it didn't work.
This is alright, but I'd work on it. If you can sing it through, though, that's good.
Good luck.
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I don't know what to add to it. It's suposed to be like a nursery school song.
It's to short. Also, what are you trying to say? good songs, at least to me, normally convey some kind of feeling or emotion or struggle. I think you need t add more to this, add verses, a chorus, ect. something else. Then I can give a better review.
The grammer and spelling seems good, so no errors there.
Hope this helped. Good critiquing.