chocoholic

I like this. I'm afraid I can't give much in the way of a critique, but that's because this piece was so good. The one thing I will say is ...

niteowl pointed out the spelling and grammar mistakes, which means I can focus on the actual song. Just a question to start off with, is this your first song? It ...

I rally liked this, although I'm not really sure if this should be in Other Fiction? I got thefeeling that this was set in the past. Perhaps 1800's England? Forgive ...

Hello! I'd just like to say before I begin, I think this sng is pretty good as it is, but as you'll find out in my critique, it could be ...

I first read this when you posted it, but I sort of forgot to critique it, but her I am now. The first thing I want to say is, I ...

Yay! You wrote with a tune in mind! I'm sure of it. Although I couldn't fit this one in perfectly, I could hear a rhythm and the beginning of a ...

Honestly, I didn't think it was very good. I liked what you were saying, I just don't think it was a very good song. There was no rhythm to it, ...

Tired, withered hands lay quietly on the fraying quilt, as eyes blanketed by cataracts rested lovingly on the clock that had given her so much time. Beautiful opening! You captured ...

Hello, I don't think I've seen you around the lyrics forums. Is this your first song posted? Have you critiqued anything here? Just wondering, because this is really good, and ...

I really liked this piece. Now, I haven't critiqued any fiction for a while, so forgive me if I'm not very helpful, but I'll try. Of course, I smile and ...

I can't say I loved this. It lacks emotion. You might not be writing a story, but you're still sort-of telling one. You need to make the reader/listener think, make ...

Ah! Thought I'd done this one. *scurries off to check date* Nup, this is from the sventh. When I was sick! I must have skimmed it without actually critiquing it. ...

Firstly I'd like to say, I quite liked this. Pats of it could use some work, but there were other parts that hit me and just said, this person is ...

As I said for your last song, this needs a lot of work, but that's why I'm here! I'll do something I don't usually do, and start off with my ...

Yeah, that was totally, like, awesome. You are like such a, like, cool, like, person. You should, like, write, like, more. It was really funny! If there was any mistakes, ...