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I like the new title, Midnight Vampire. And I really like this poem altogether. I read the version you had before you edit it, and now that it is edited, ...

This is really good. It flows well and isn't so puzzling that people don't even want to read it, but just enough so that people want to think about it ...

This is a good idea, but there are a few easily fixable errors. Infodumps, as others have mentioned, shouldn't be used. A few grammatical errors, and some punctuation problems, need ...

This poem is actually pretty good. It reminds me of poems by E. E. Cummings (who is my favorite poet). He also makes use of phrases in parenthesis. I've always ...

Wow, that is really good. For such a short piece, it has so much meaning. I mean, it leaves questions in your mind, such as "what was hitting the earth? ...

I really like the idea you have here. As I read, I wanted to find out more about how the "tagging" worked and what the characters were going to do. ...

This poem is very creative. You can really get a sense of dread as you read it. It also seems like there is a deeper meaning to the words, or ...