chiaro0990

Well, I removed the punctuation at the end of the line because someone had told me that line breaks have the same purpose as the punctuation. And somehow, putting too ...

Excuse me for my rudeness. I don't think there are grammatical errors you were suggesting about my poetry. Instead, you were trying to say was: they seemed awkward that it ...

I like this one. I can somehow relate everything you said in this poem...very good indeed. Not only that, you easily transfer an emotional feeling as we read your poetry, ...

This is great and good! I like your style in writing. :D

This is what I call "poetry." You have engage imagery in every line, which I like it the most, and you simply embrace the rhymic tone and an incredible feeling. ...

Hmm, you're good with this. I like how you've written the poem, lovely indeed. In my opinion, I think it's better to combine all of the stanza into one to ...

@keekers: Oh, that explains everything. Well, I can only say one thing, write on!

@Jennya: actually, the arrangement of this poem has no meaning at all. I tend to arrange like that to create an ambiguity, that's what I've read in the internet.