charlottejoness

Thank you so much for taking the time to review this, I appreciate it a lot! I have edited it according to your reviews, thanks again :)

Thank you very much for your review, I have edited my piece now so hopefully it's a little better :)

I love the extended metaphors you used in this piece. It really allowed me, as the reader, to understand the plot of this poem. Please keep it up, I love ...

Note: This review has been deleted

I absolutely love romance so I had to read this! I adore your imagery, this piece is full of vivid detail which allows me as a reader to see the ...

Thank you so much this made me so happy that you liked it! I agree, more description would have been better but I may make a second part to this ...

Thank you so much for reviewing my poem, it is my first so I'm pleased you liked the simplicity which is what I was going for. I totally agree with ...

I added stanzas but they've gone haha. They're meant to occur before every line 'Looking, glaring/staring'.

Thank you so much for your review, I will try to improve my next chapter :)

I really enjoyed this, the simplicity of the subject and the amount of detail added was so interesting! I love how you described the little girl through her excitement of ...

Thank you so much! I have re-read the sentences that you mentioned and I understand why the commas should be changed. I've began to write my second chapter and I'm ...

Thank you very much for your review, romance is one of my favourites too! I understand about the overuse and improperly way I have used commas.I wasn't completely aware of ...

Thank you for your comments, I really appreciate it! I'm so glad about all of these positive points, and the way you have interpreted it is the way in which ...

Yes I totally understand what you mean by confusing! Although I've read through it many times I still didn't notice now much, until I saw these amazing reviews. I wanted ...

Thank you so much for taking the time to review my writing, it honestly means so much to me! You mentioned in your first paragraph that you expected Connor to ...