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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Life goes on...

    I must say that this is a mediocre poem, I can tell that you didn't spend along time on it. Just kind of popped in your head so you started ...

    Oct 12, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Missing You

    The poem is not really impressive, mediocre. It seems to be so forced it lacks flow, and something just seems as if it has a child's tongue(well written non the ...

    Oct 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Nero's Dream

    It seems to be surfaced and well looked. But the fact is with all constructiveness, you didn't really try. You on the facet this seems to be a fascinating piece ...

    Oct 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Can nobody hear me?

    I'm not much of a critique, mainly because I think constructive criticism is still criticism(I'm not one to care of others feelings much, but I understand pain so I don't.) ...

    Oct 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Eulogy

    Eulogy Chrysanthemums line the path I walk As I roam the graveyard at close of day. Wondering if the dead could talk- What have they seen, what would they say? ...

    Feb 17, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Little Susie

    awwww that was absolutely sadnining. It very nicely written though for being horrible, cant you write more peaceful things? I like the you wrote the piece though mimicing the format ...

    Nov 11, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Happy Birthday!

    Thats absolutely adorable, hahaha and I love the out there humor of the whole piece because its one of the ones that make me happy not just like a standard ...

    Nov 11, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Fight the Night

    I really like that short simple sweet straight to the point and quite meaning full Brealdown =]: Face the night death is fun time to fight no time to run ...

    Nov 9, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: [Deleted]

    This is a very gorgeous poem. I like the way you rhymed than stopped rhyming but the beat and flow still kept' the same. I like this poem I hope ...

    Nov 8, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: my poems from before.........advice wanted...

    I really really really like the first one. Im not a huge huge huge fan i really like rhyming poems, but sometimes theres a good one i go oh I ...

    Nov 8, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Forever Young

    hmm. Your poem at first glance seems mildly confusing and after a multiple of lines i believe the last one is really just like the line that anchors the whole ...

    Nov 8, 2008


I took a deep breath and listened to the old brag of my heart; I am, I am, I am.
— Sylvia Plath