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This is amazing! I love how in the beginning you are in a dream and then you come back to reality. Also it's pretty creepy when in the dream she ...

This is very interesting! 1. Grammar mistakes • Fourth sentence needs a capital I • That's basically it because it was just a little intro. 2. I like the ending ...

HI Cgirl here for a review! First off, spelling mistake, it's "meant not ment". Second, this is kind of short. Maybe you can make it a diary instead of just ...

Hey! 1. Another cliffhanger! You definitely know how to end a chapter! 2. I love how you are doing each chapter in a different person's point of view. I think ...

Hey Audy! Time for a review from...Cgirl! First off, maybe you should look over your work again. I saw that you forgot to capitalize some things once or twice. I ...

Hey! This was pretty good except there were just a few grammar mistakes. 1. Some words in italics don't have space before and after them. It makes it confusing to ...

Hey! Cgirl here to review! 1. Great job so far. I'm drawn into the story already even though it's just a prologue. The idea is great and makes the reader ...

Great job so far! 1. I love how this is going so far. This is a lesson to all girls. Never fight over the hairspray while there is a curling ...

It's Cgirl again! 1. Ew. It was kind of disturbing when you talked about the woman's eye socket. That's just my opinion, you should still keep it there. 2. One ...

Hi Deanie! It's Cgirl back for a review on your amazing piece. 1. The whole time Avril's parents left I was like, "Something is going to happen, something is going ...

Hello Deanie! Cgirl here to review! 1. Great job so far! I like the story line and the characters. Naomi seems so cute and I think it's great how you ...

Hello! Cgirl here for a review! First off this was definitely creepy! Especially the ending when the child has a man face and the teeth of a cat. Second, I ...

*claps loudly* This was an amazing job! Definitely not meant for little kids but amazing! At first I was like, oh no he's going to kill her. Then it turns ...

Great job! I love how you use your figurative language which is vital in a poem. This was a beautiful poem and made me think the moon as something beautiful. ...

Oh my oh my. This was so good it almost made me cry. And when Mary kills herself I think I started to cry. This was so good and left ...