carelessaussie13

Hi there. Well, I actually don't have much to say here. I liked it. I will definitely be interested in reading the rest. A couple of things, just to think ...

Hi there! Well, like you said, this could use some critique, but the point of a critique isn't to make your story better. The point of a critique is to ...

Hi there! I have to ask, are you from a different country? The types of grammatical errors you made were a lot like the ones German speakers make when they ...

Hi there, Uh, this is really confusing. I don't understand it at all. First you say you're a famous author, then you're being taken to a gifted school, then it's ...

Hi there. I admire what you're doing. Trying to evoke fear. But I wasn't afraid, reading this, and I have an idea why. It was the length. In my opinion, ...

Jeans, t-shirt, Why do we care what she's wearing? Maybe try, "You'd never know from the clothes she wears, but she's hurting inside" or something. normal appearance, but hurting inside, ...

Hi there! ... ... I am absolutely sure I had some stuff to critique, but then I got further in and I forgot them all. I was captivated. It's now ...

Hi there! I used to read a lot of science fiction stories, but after a while I realized that none of the stories have any real characters. Sure, they've got ...

1 "Farah, no!" Heat engulfed the shadow of a woman, her blonde curls blending with the dancing flames. A sheet of grey smoke separated mother from daughter, growing denser each ...

Hi there! Okay, first off, I think I found something in your writing which I am very proud of in my own, which is being unafraid to give in completely ...

Hi there, I don't know where you're trying to go with this, so it's hard to critique, but I'll give it a go. Seeing the world through Kalu's eyes can ...

You know what I think? I think it should be more about the 'how'. Uh, I mean, Hi! Good job! A little obscure, though. Basically all you say is that ...

Hi. So basically I just read the little summary at the top and I'm not interested in reading the story. Why? Because Nanali is twelve and should be reading the ...

(The family in the piece below consists of devote Jews. Don't let the religious hints put you off though, they aren't too big) The eagle had grown deathly still and ...

Hey there, I liked this, but it seemed to personal to be expressed as "you" all the time. it seemed too general. I think it would be stronger written in ...