Starlet is in love with Rayne and Nick who both hate Roman who loves Nanali who is in love with Starlet's older brother, Demetri, who has some crazy obsession with Starlet. Starlet and Roman secretly love each other, but they don't know that yet. Nanali is twelve, but Roman is eighteen, which is one year older than Rayne, two years older than Starlet and four years younger than Demetri. Starlet is a schizophrenic bubble-head and Roman is hell-bent on destroying the bad in the world. Nanali is a little girl that can't keep her pants on, Demetri is a secret rapist who won't let Starlet keep her pants on, and Rayne is a hopeless romantic, who always has to compete with his way-too-close-to-perfect Romeo-blessed twin, Nick, for the same girl. This may be one on the weirdest love stories ever witnessed.~~
*Starlet*
I sat with my back against the wall, my knees pulled up to my chest, and my eyes shut so tightly it hurt.
"Leave me alone," I screamed," Get out! Please, just get out!" He was back again, and wouldn't stop laughing at me, that sick, wet, throaty laugh that echoed through the small enclosed space of my room and bounced off the walls hitting me in my face. He always came around this time, when I was alone. Just to taunt me, to mock me, to remind me I was crazy, as if I couldn't figure that out on my own. I needed big brother, I needed someone. I was alone, He loved it when I was alone, and He loved to see me in pain. He found joy in hearing my terror filled sobs break the near empty silence and watching my clammy hands attach themselves to my round child-like face. He loved to witness the previous light grey color of my eyes take a red tint, and seeing my long black hair fall out in small strands from the stress he caused me. The laughing stopped for a heavenly ten seconds so I risked a peak through my slanted tear-stained eyes and saw his face floating five-inches away from mine. He was no more than a shadow, a shadow with inhumanly long, yellow, jagged, knife-like teeth and red, beady, rat eyes. That stupid, yet terrifying, smile was plastered on his face. I cringed back and tried to mold myself into the wall. Yes, he hissed, fear me.
"I do! I do!" I was on the boarder line of hysteria, tears rolled down my cheeks like the rains of that of a ferocious storm. My heart was being squeezed tighter every minute, I was near explosion. You are insane. No one can help you now. You're all mine. All mine.
"All yours, but, please, leave me be!" All his. Him...
I first started seeing Him when I was about ten. I didn't know what to think at first, I figured He must have been this so called boogeyman my older brother had told me so much about. Big brother always used to fit Him into the simplest of things and used Him as threats when I did something wrong.
"Star, brush your teeth or the boogeyman will come and eat your toes."
"Starlet Mansion, clean your room or I swear I’ll call the boogeyman! I have him on speed dial!"
"Star, now, come on, we've been through this before. Now, you better just take off your clothes or the boogeyman will be paying you a special visit. We don't want that, now, do we?"
And no I surely didn't. Up until that one special life-altering night I hadn't seen the boogeyman, but I knew I didn't want to. I liked my toes attached to my body. Big brother was always nice about it though, he would climb into bed and lay with me to protect me from the boogeyman, and if it wasn't for him I wouldn't have known that wearing clothes while I slept attracted Him to my room. Big brother always said that if we slept naked it was better because the boogeyman wouldn't see us, because he couldn't see naked people, he also said that if I let him sleep in the same bed with me that was double good because the boogeyman hated crowed places. Big brother was right, when I slept with him the boogeyman never came, and especially when I slept naked the boogeyman never came. A little worn-out light bulb flickered over my head as the realization of what I just memorized hit me like an on-coming train.
"Big brother! Big brother, come quick, please," He hated crowded places. No, you idiot, don't call him! I started ripping off my clothes, starting with the thin Hello Kitty t-shirt that clung tightly to my sweat covered chest and ending with a pair of lacy underwear my brother got me for my birthday. Where did you go? I can't see you! Come back! Fear me, dammit, fear me! Big brother burst in my room just as I opened my eyes and saw Him fizzle away and die.
"Starlet, did he come back?" I nodded my head, even though He was gone, the tears wouldn't stop running down my cheeks," Oh, honey, big bro is here, it's okay." I felt warm arms around me and I sunk into them gratefully. He started rubbing the middle of my back, he always knew that calmed me down, and, sure enough, my tears slowly dissolved into sniffles and then faded into nothing at all," There, there, see, its okay. Here let me get your pills." The warmth of big brother left me and I was instantly cold, but I wouldn't put my clothes back on. No, not so He could see me again. I closed my eyes and heard big bro slid my top drawer open and shuffle through a mess of clothes, until finally I heard him shake my little bottle of helpers. Big brother said that I have to take these every day or else He would just come sooner. He said that the little thingies inside that orange bottle were pills that the boogeyman was scared of and that if I had them in my body He wouldn't come, but, even though He was afraid of the little, orange bottle, things he might come anyway, so I had to be careful.
Big brother was always taking care of me, every since mother and father died. Big brother says they got in a car accident and that they were always watching over us. I got mad when he said that, if mother and father were "watching over me" how come they didn't help chase Him off? How come they let me suffer? It doesn't matter now, I have big brother to help me. I have big brother to save me when I need help. I felt the warmness of big brother's body pressing against mine, pulling me up off the ground and into his arms.
"You didn't take your meds today, did you?" I shook my head a very somber 'no', still unable to talk though my tears were long gone, along with Him," Didn't I always tell you that if you didn't take your meds He would come." I nodded, sinking my face into big brother's shoulder, dancing dangerously on the edge of tears again," Here, open your mouth." I opened my mouth obediently and almost instantly felt big brother's tongue on mine and my "meds" on top of it. Big brother said that if I took my pills from his mouth it would work doubly-well because, well, big brother didn't have a reason for that, he just said it worked. I didn't notice I was crying again until I tasted the salty drops of tears on the edge of my mouth.
"Thanks brother." I looked up into big brother's eyes. The were a light blue and dotted with little flecks of green, his hair was dark brown, almost black, and in that wind-blown style that came natural to him, and his teeth were big and white, exposed in that smile he always got when he rescued me from Him.
"Anything for you, Star, well, goodnight." He pried my hands from around his waist and headed for the door. A fresh stream of tears washed down my face as he turned his back; I could practically hear Him laughing at me again. Mine, soon. Starlet would be all mines again soon.
"Don't leave, big brother! Please don't" I collapsed on the ground in a new fit of back-breaking sobs.
"Huh? Oh, don't do that, Star. I'll stay, big brother will stay."
Soon brother and I were in bed, both of us invisible to Him, and both of us doubly protected.
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When I awoke big brother was still sleeping behind me, his arms wrapped tightly around my waist, pulling me into him. I turned around and stared at his face for a moment. His eyes were closed gently and his mouth was slightly open, large clumps of hair fell across his face and his bare chest moved softly up and down, the shell necklace that I made for him fit loosely around his neck.
"Demetri," I placed a hand on his shoulder and shook him softly," Deme, big brother, wake up," He grumbled and pulled me closer, burying his face in my chest," Time to wake up, big brother." The sunlight was pouring in from the window to the left of me, my only window, the red satin curtains that hung in front of it made the light take on a red tint, making my whole room seem like the inside of a cherry.
"Star?" I tore my vision away from the walls and looked at big brother who was now rubbing the sleep from his eyes," Okay, okay, I'm up." He sat up and reached his arms up to the sky and stretched his jaw wide open," Okay, sweetie, go brush your teeth and wash your face, kay?" I nodded and got up and started towards the bathroom but was stopped by the sound of big brother's voice," Don't forget your clothes, dear!" I ran back into my room and threw on a pair of underclothes and one of big brother's extra long t-shirts I always kept in my bottom drawer. Brother was always so nice to me, he always knew what to do to keep me safe.
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thank you all for your reviews! umm, Demetri dosn't have a twin, you must be thinking of Rayne and Nick, they wern't even introduced yet. And that little paragraph at the beginning is meant to be the little passage they have at the back of the books. Jeez, I didn't mean for Star to come across as Nyu, but she's schitzophrenic and an idiot savant. Sorry, but that's just how she is. The next post will be Demetri's, I hope that clears up more.
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I'm going to be perfectly honest, I didn't like it. I guess it just wasn't for me, so this won't help you very much except to tell you the thoughts of people who won't read your story after the prologue.
The prologue, or whatever it was, interested me. But the story itself killed it. I don't have a problem with incest; I have a problem with this, this, this mixture of hello kitty, lolita cuteness and utter cluelessness; i find her attachment to her brother more freakish than his weird,
fatherlyhusbandly relationship with her.My biggest pet peeve in this world is these anime-esque girls. Starlet reminds me of the alternate personality of the main character of elven lied, Nyu. The only reason I tolerated that abomination of a character is because her other personality could rip people apart people with invisible hands.
Mind-crippling naivete is not cute. I like the themes of incest and schizophrenia, especially, but the delivery killed it for me.
Sorry that wasn't too helpful, but I thought you'd appreciate my integrity, at least, in that I didn't lie to you.
Hey! Okay, I thought this was very good. Really, I have no criticism for the actual piece. But, I do have to say, you shouldn't have to post an explanation paragraph at the beginning of the post. If the story doesn't explain itself, then it's not doing it's job.
Also, you have a lot of characters, so make sure to keep them easily distinguishable from each other, and make sure that they all have an active role, and are actually needed.

I can't wait to read some more.
~Karma
Wow, this is pretty interesting, but in a good way. And please don't be offended when I say this, but it was sick in a good way, really sick. Just the prologue, the first little paragraph you told about every one's love connection. That was wow, in a weird really good way. It's very interesting, and I want to read more, so please don't stop!
Hi. So basically I just read the little summary at the top and I'm not interested in reading the story. Why? Because Nanali is twelve and should be reading the Boxcar Children, not taking her pants off for anyone. No one wants to read about a pre-teen sex addict. Demitri is in love with his own little sister? Disgusting! Starlet is in love with three people? I'm sorry. If you tone down the incest and perversion and cut a few characters, you might have something.
EDIT: Okay, well, I actually read the story and it was much better than I imagined. I have a few questions (for example, Demetri's twin brother Nick doesn't seem very interested in Demetri's sexual abuse of their sister) but on the whole it was pretty good. I will be interested to see where you take this.