Hey singingsaturdays!
One of the things that struck me about this poem was the lack of story, which is a bit odd seeing as you posted this in Narrative Poetry. Narrative poetry usually has some sort of story attached with it while this poem generally only contains a couple of snapshots of instances you had when you were together. So a bit odd!
Now, to make this poem stand out more and give it an additional flair of originality, consider putting it more in a story form so we can see what happens. Plus, let's face it... what happens to you is unique, so the most original thing you can write about is yourself. And that's awesome.
Thanks for posting this and see you around YWS!
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