carelessaussie13

I agree with everything everyone before me has said, but I'd like to add one more thing. The use of "Because if not" is a little too repetitive. I'm really ...

Very good poem, but there are some things that could be reworked. For instance, you could work in some other senses besides sight. Maybe the you can small the salty ...

People have commented about not gettng it, but I think that was kind of the point. I don't know much about dyslexia, but I think it's basically when the dyslexic ...

You know what would make this really funny? A unicorn technician! If you can keep up the cliched style through the whole thing, I think it'll be great, but I ...

'I glanced at Bevan, wondering what he was thinking about. I was thinking about the city. As always I wondered what it held that could be so dangerous, so forbidden. ...

I think it was great, but it would be a lot better in my opinion if we knew why Caroline's dad killed himself then, or at all. It might make ...

Wow! This is really good, but I think it could be better with a character in there to experience the fear and the excitement. Other than that, three thumbs up! ...