carelessaussie13

Hi there, Let's see. The first thing I want to say is that you've got a great grasp of beginning, middle and end, great dialog and a comfortable style over ...

Hi there, So I can't say I have the miracle cure for this piece, which I don't think is as bad as you seem to think it is. But one ...

Hi there, Firstly I want to say that I love this type of piece, this sort of quasi-folk-tale style. You've got a great rhythm in your prose - one of ...

Hi there, So from a technical standpoint, I am totally impressed with this poem. I've been translating the poetry of Sappho from Ancient Greek and your poem reminds me a ...

Hi there, First of all, unless you are e. e. cummings you should use punctuation and capitalization in your poems; it's just good form. Secondly, just wanted to point out ...

Hi there, First of all, I am so very sorry for the pain you are in; I can't imagine how that must hurt. Secondly, I want to say that as ...

Hi there, I couldn't help but notice that you're twelve. Seriously? That's awesome. For your age you are really very good. But I'm going to give you some tips, and ...

Hey there. I like the ideas, that you can't know what's going on inside someone else, that we are held back by our inherent qualities... but you know all that, ...

Hi there. Let's get started. So, I like the simplicity of it. It's a just a small-town cafe, a hot summer day and two kids, but somehow you've made a ...

Hi. This is good. A couple things, though. One, I had no idea that this was going on in World War 2 era. It could have been any time. Why ...

Hey, so this was interesting. I like that he knew Freddy from Abnormal Psych and then it turned out he was in a psych hospital or something... But I had ...

Aw man, was this ever awesome! I truly loved it. I loved how you never really took time to explain Clara's situation, but by the end of the piece I ...

Hi there! Well, this was definitely provocative. I loved it. I could totally sympathize with the dude. He seemed flat, though. That was my main issue. He was at least ...

Hi there! So I have to be honest. I didn't really like this. It read a little bit like a school assignment; like your teacher said to write a poem ...

Hi there. So, this was really cliche. Like, really, really cliche. There was nothing here that I haven't already read somewhere else. Your characters were flat. Your dialogue was uninspiring. ...