captain.classy

Hi there! I feel like this definitely has the potential to be a nice and adorable story, however I don't really know what's going on. I realize that you want ...

Hi there! This was interesting, and you're really good at writing action scenes; making them seem real, like a movie, not like you're taking forever to read it. I read ...

Hi there! This is cute. I like how you wrote about something that not a lot of people get to do. It's interesting and educational at the same time. Since ...

Hi there! Ooh I love him too. Wow, what a great character. By the end, I really knew who he was. I don't know if this is big of a ...

Hi there! Woah, this was good! I felt like I was reading an actual novel, save for a few things, but we'll get there. The only thing I don't like ...

This is very sad, and very fun to read out loud. I just acted it out to myself. (I wish I could act in front of other people. xD) Anyways, ...

Hi there! Wow this is amazing! I'd imagine your dialogue scenes are great because you're more comfortable with them, but standing alone this was a very riveting piece. Quotes 'N' ...

Hi Pecan! This is really good. I like the metaphor here/ it's one we so often use in life and can relate to. However I feel as if it might ...

Hi there! This is so sad, and so menacing at the same time. I can totally see a helper to a main character saying this, someone perhaps with some magical ...

Hi there! This is really good. I like it a lot, and I'm sorry more people haven't read/reviewed it because they really should. One of the only things I can ...

This is a lot better than it was before, however there are still a few minor details that need improvement. ^^ Quotes 'N' Comments “Alright,”Madeleine said, biting her life to ...

Hi there! This is so adorable! I love this. It's cute, and totally retains the dreamy aspects of the game and show. I can totally relate your character to Ash, ...

Hi there! This was so good, especially since the Japan tsunami, and watching footage of the scene, I can picture the emotions vividly. It's a really good idea to relate ...

Hi there! So I think the only thing wrong with this story is the grammar. What you need to do is read, a lot. Possibly other stories on here, or ...

Hey there! So, this would be amazing if it were a graphic novel. However, it's not, therefore you need a little help in the 'looks' department, meaning I can't picture ...