Walls

Hi Pecan!

This is really good. I like the metaphor here/ it's one we so often use in life and can relate to. However I feel as if it might be a bit too common, but that's for you to decide. If you're having some feelings too, why not add a little flare to it? Why not change it from a wall to something else? Like gravity, perhaps? How it always keeps you down, always keeps you from the stars (the stars is commonly used as a symbol for dreams).

you could see the monstrous anxiety clouding his brain.

There are too many words here, in my opinion. I'd get rid of monstrous, since that word is a little childish sounding, and this line is just flooded with syllables.

"I'm just not... curious," He stutters.

To me, this line would be a lot stronger without the 'he shutters.' I think we can assume it's him saying it, if you put it into context. By the way, when did the curiosity factor come in? The last bit of dialogue we hear is the mother telling him he's like a wall. A little explanation about the conversation and how it got to here would be cool!

Overall

This was a great poem. I like how it's easy to relate to. I guess I can see myself as your brother, and my sister as you. I'm more of the reserved one while she's loud and obnoxious (not saying that you're obnoxious. xD) I also like the simplicity of it. I like how you didn't try to overcrowd it with metaphors and moral lessons. You left us to figure out the rest, and I find that more interesting than a poem that tells you everything.

Keep writing,

Classy