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Yum! that was good. Very nice setting and descriptions. You get a very nice picture in your head reading this. MORE! MORE! MORE! MORE!

Loved it ! I really like your imagery and descriptions. I look forward to reading more poetry by you.

Oops, yeah, I didn't get that. Reading it again, I see how it is, but it is still confusing. Sorry about that! :)

Hmmm. Your imagery is excellent, descriptions are perfect. I agree with Amelia though.

Wow. I didn't get that she was looking in a mirror till the end. How did she punch the mirror without breaking it?

Good Job! I liked this. Like gadi said, there really isn't that much to critique on, but for just two lines you really got your message across. It actually almost ...

HAHAHAHA! Very unexpected. I don't really have any negative comments for this, I loved it.

This is much better now. I have one problem, and that is: What period in history were you planning for this to take place? When I first read it, I ...

Okay, this was odd. I liked the last sentence. :)

Thanks so much! Your reviews were really helpful. Some of the problems with tense may be because I actually first wrote this in present, but then I switched it back. ...

Odd in a good way? Obviously SOMEONE thinks like that, since I wrote it like that :) Anyway, thanks for telling me your opinion.

I sort of liked it, but they did a pretty awful job with the movie. I liked how they did the characters though.

Thanks azila. You review was very helpful. I'll keep your suggestions in mind when I edit. I think I'll wait to post the next bit until I get another reply ...

Thanks! Now, this is muuuuch better. :) I have to say that I found it confusing in the beggining. First you are talking about something that is happening, but then ...

Ok, I have a question. What where you trying to achieve with this piece? Are you trying to spread the word about how bad smoking is? I kinda agree with ...