brokestarvingwriter

Hmmmmm... when I view it, it's broken into stanzas. Help???

Great imagery! "Feilds" should be spelled "fields" and maybe instead of "skinny" a more descriptive word?

would it detract from the story if I took out the "soon there was a treetop community" line to fix the rhyme scheme?

You should fix your grammar/spelling. Also, it sounds more like a diary entry than an actual polished piece. The emotion was good though- it felt very raw.

I love it! Very surprising, and I like the way the title foreshadows the end.