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Re: Some Haiku and Tanka
i like melting a lot but i didn't quite care for louder yet because it was vague. melting was a pretty landscape painted in my head while louder yet was ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: When You Leave
hi :D okay i love the first stanza its like your asking them questions but the reader can still feel like your talking to them. Do you know what it ...
Aug 30, 2010 -
Re: Where Would You Turn Up a Song?
Where would you turn up a song? Like Baby on the sea. Except the sky is black today- Baby’s eye transfixed on me. I pity what knows the sun once ...
Aug 23, 2010 -
Re: After you left
Standing alone outside, waiting to feel again. But there’s no one else. I have so many voices in my head. Still I can hear your silence pushing me down. Running ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: My 'friends'
I wrote this while mad at some of my friends. I don't exactly remember why but I do remember typing fiercely on the keyboard and saving the document. And if ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: See This Smile?
I always see phrases like "Silent Scream", and wanted to try writing something along those lines. But not like the normal things stemming from it. I don't know if I ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: My mistakes
i love the morbid to this, its how i feel and how i write to. and writing morbid is always so in depth. i really felt your pain, your sorrow. ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: "But an old friend"
this is amazing! you described her exactly as she is, exactly what she does. ive felt her stab me over and over again and even just reading this made me ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: Fading Light
i really love the first verse its really good and i love the chorus to its something you wont get tired of and it would be nice to listen to, ...
Aug 9, 2010 -
Re: All of Me (For Her)
this is really good! I love how the beginning strings along well. i love the metaphors you use it really made me think and put me into the song. i ...
Aug 9, 2010 -
Re: Keyboards
a lot of it was just random, maybe try having all of the things connect in some sot of way, it just seemed a little pointless though if you get ...
Aug 9, 2010
