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Re: The House of Diamonds
I LOVE THIS.!!!!!! Hey, DIAMONDS are a girls BESTFRIEND. ! Alot of discription, love the big words. Pretty words my favorite part is "A family that glitters in the dark, ...
Nov 25, 2013 -
Re: Fortis
These a really good poem. i love the word you use in stanza 16 "conspicuously" pretty word. i feel like you had these into you, its like yuor reading it, ...
Nov 1, 2013 -
Re: The first look
I love these Poem, but the part where you had " I thought you'd think me weird" it should be "I'm". I love these poem. love the discribtion, everything even ...
Oct 12, 2013 -
Re: Lips and Lies
I'm here to edit. Who or what person are you talking bout? I confused?? These is my Opinon,it doesn't make sense. "The red lips, with thick lipstick - glowing. She ...
Oct 8, 2013 -
Re: Blossoms on the Pear Tree
I dont think there's nothing wrong with it. I sounds good, but of course like you said it does'nt make sense. Your taking about a pear tree at the end, ...
Oct 5, 2013 -
Re: Friends Reunited
What?is all i got to say. I don't know who or what these is. it looks like a Crap that's just written on paper, just some lines that does't make ...
Oct 5, 2013 -
Re: somethings and nothings and in betweens
Hey im here, i like this but, what you said in these lines "i made a promise to myself not to become a nothing spot in our house. i keep ...
Oct 5, 2013 -
Re: Once Upon a Time
Hey, I Love these Poem it reminds me of some things. I don't think you should use time alot there are other words, that rhythms and some that don't that ...
Oct 5, 2013 -
Re: Too demanding?!
Hey, i like these poem you wrote but here are a few things. "Damn" you must have words better than that, langue. I'm not going to lie and say i ...
Oct 4, 2013 -
Re: imagination damnation
Hello, these sounds good, but you don't have to rhythm in every line. I LOVE your pretty WORDS, but before you post it make sure you re-read it. "I want ...
Oct 4, 2013