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Hey! Born here :) As Kit said, there wasn't much emotion in this piece. But either way i still liked it. You had a way with words i found, in ...

I really did like this. But i think you might have said cloud abit too many times. Other than that it was a very good piece. :D I've always been ...

LOVE it! I did see a few gramatical errors, just go through and re-read it. I'm not very good at editing things, so i'll leave that for someone else. I'm ...

Hello ! No body has said anything so here i am :) Well, i think this has potential to be a good story. But you need to make it more ...

Welcome to YWS! :) I think this story has great potential. Although it was only a short couple of paragraphs, it was still very good. Some things could be stretched ...

I agree with most things that people have said here. The constant use of, baby, did get a bit annoying but also its kind of sweet in away. But i ...

I agree with everything Stella said. Your story seems to be going just a tad to fast, maybe try slow it down? When your MC killed that lady i was ...

This is very good! I agree with the others, just a few mistakes, simple mistakes, if you got through and read it again you'll be able to notice them. Very ...

WOW! This was really sad! I actually felt tears come to my eyes near the last sentence. But remember your punctuation, most of your questions didn't have question marks on ...

Hello! (Mistakes are in Blue.) I really REALLY like, no LOVE, this piece of work. It was well written and i liked how you ended it. Only a few small ...

Hey! :) I really did like this piece, short but sweet! Very nice :) The storm had begun in the early summer night. The lightning lit up the dark night ...

SILLY! :) I thought i'd stalk all your work. Naaah only joking...or am i? Hahahaha Anyhoo.. I really like this piece, i thought it was sweet. But i sort of ...

Hey! I told you i would review your story! :) And here i am... Okay first off, good start! You really captured the way a child would be torn between ...

I really like this piece of work, ALOT! I like the way you described how your mum did things before she went to bed, even though she said she was ...

Thrillhouse - Why does she not deserve your sympathy? That's a bit harsh. Wow! This is really sad, you wrote this well though. I'm so sorry you feel so depressed. ...