bookworm201

I love the first two lines. Congrats on stepping into the narrative naturally. I know you need to tell the story, but the one thing I couldn't mess with was ...

first off, when i realized what they were going to do, i felt a lump in my throat. my thought (in which i pray i am not repeating anyone, but ...

things i liked- the detached tone, the future tense in the end, the plurality, the language, the secong person. things i was confused about- the reference to the anti-drug campaigns. ...

i love the lazy summer day vibe, and the characters are interesting, but they do seem older. just one thing that really stuck out- do guys say "every fiber in ...

spelling, grammar, and format need work. also you need more reviews. i got the depression bit, but there isn't much to keep a reader locked in. since this is your ...

Yay! V. good, I knew you could do it! And it is a bit cliche, but you write well, so it'd be one of those books i'd pick up when ...

Good idea, but kinda hard to gauge from this point. The one problem I see in this is the diary format. It's a cool style, but you're not really pulling ...

Oddly enough I had an idea along this line years ago- a necklace you can't get off- but I never followed through with it. It'll be cool to see where ...

Good idea, but werewolves are a bit overdone... I'm not quite sure about this, if you're going with a more historical aspect, I think you can't use contractions. Not quite ...

Greatest book my crappy middle school teacher made us read. It almost makes up for her making us read books three reading levels below our grade level. One of the ...

Whoa. The concept reminds me of a book I read years ago, but I don't know what it was called. The details seem surreal- like when you've got a high ...

A good summary of one of those universal truths. The change the pov needs to be tweaked, but that's easy enough. As a general rule, pov should be the same ...

Okay, I don't write or really even read werewolf stories, but I'm gonna go out on a limb and say your story sounds good. The character flaws you've introduced are ...

they're the books you read if you just want to read- like chewing bubble gum. It won't fill you up, but at least it gets your mind off of food/reading. ...

interesting premise, but you need to get in the description of En earlier- I have a feeling that this is something that will be important, so the earlier you learn ...