blacknightscry

I don't know if this will help but try replacing light and darkness with love and hatred and the rhythm at the beginning wasn't intentional .-. I know what you ...

thank you for the advice! I'll definitely continue it then ^-^

Hello, I really like this poem and how you went from Juliet in the first stanza to Romeo in the next two then smoothly back to Juliet for the last ...

Well I was really going for setting and leaving imagery up to the reader's imagination. I would have put more punctuation and paid more attention to the words but i'm ...

Thank you everyone for your advice and critics. I appreciate it a lot. ^-^

For two in the morning it's a very likable poem ^-^ short, sweet, and to the point. :D

thank you ^-^ The advice I've gotten has really helped a lot! So thank you very much :D

Sorry about the bad Spelling and stuff. I kinda forgot to go back and check, but I've corrected it now. Thank you very much :D (\(\ (^^) ((")(") crescent, black ...

One - In no way shape or form was I offended or believed that anyone came off as rude or mean. I took it as you being serious and that ...

Conrad - I see what your saying and i do have to agree, I believe its missing something too. Unfortunately even I, Being the writer, do not currently understand what ...

Thank you ^-^ The advice was wonderful and I know what you guys are saying. One of my problems is keeping what I write short and taking out what I ...